Communication Studies Exam Prep Guide: Strategies for CAPE Essays

[00:00:00]hey guys welcome back to my youtube channel so so many of you sent me messages asking me to do another marathon this time for communication studies and some other subjects and um i'm sorry i couldn't go live but if i had gone live it would be at some time that's very inconvenient to you all i'm sure and um i also had to prepare for the chemistry unit too because they've been asking for that as well or you guys have been asking for that as well so yeah so i had to just you know do a simple recording and stuff and i'm not even sure if i'm going to do any editing or anything like that i'm going to just post the raw video because i need to get this out to you guys before your exams actually come around you know so um this won't be like a video where i'll add something here this won't be a video where i'll go through in too much detail about how to go about doing this but rather just giving you some tips and pointers that i um employed when i was writing my essays for my grade 12 year alright no module one module one is basically about gathering and processing information and most times the question asks you to um deal with organic organizational strategies and the language techniques um wait a minute if you're not following me on instagram do me a huge favor and go over there to underscore cam underscore eo or at young underscore genius.official and follow me on my pages i'll follow you back on underscore cam underscore eo all right so yeah do that real quick for me and let's just dive into this i guess so you whenever you're writing your essays what you want to keep in mind when the outside to identify your strategies and your techniques you need to provide evidence um provide evidence for where where you saw them right so i'm going to go through my first practice essay that i did right and show you how i went about doing it i guess i'll give you i'll i'll shoot a pic of the actual paper that i wrote on of course i didn't use that picture because or for the entire video because um kind of look like you go through world war three and come back you know and i kind of would like my things to be at um a certain quality so that's the reason so let's deal with this right so i think this was from the 2010 communication studies paper right and what you want to do is read through your extract and pick up strategies and techniques used right that's the basic thing that you want to do all right so let's start with the reading so after analyzing 102 local tv newscasts from 52 metropolitan areas in the united states for content and presentation a media watch group found that only 41.3 percent of the programs contained news what makes up the rest of the newscast right now on an average 30.4 percent of air time of local tv news consists of commercials in fact some of the stations surveyed devoted more time to commercials than news in addition news airtime is often filled with fluff states states the report summarizing the findings of the study all right let's do a quick pause and stuff all right first of all 102.

[00:03:59][Music] 102 newscast right my hand isn't on my table all right great 102 newscasts and 52 metropolitan areas also we see 30.4 percent of air time all of this we can say we are already seeing the use of a statistical data right so that's already an organizational strategy that we're seeing right let's continue for a bit now under the headline fluff the report groups the comet cumulative airtime given to chit chat between anchors promotions and previews of upcoming stories the soft or silly news and the items about celebrities a sample of some fluff stories terrible tenors contest reporters takes awesome incredible astounding ride on roller coaster and more people buy sandwich spread at supermarkets all right analyzing right here we see the use of inverted commas right the use of inverted commas that's also a strategy right and fluffier is also i think it's hyperbolic right so i would say hyperbole is used here and this could be used as um a technique rather than a strategy over here soft as well in inverted commas right here terrible tenno's contest reporter takes awesome incredible astounding ride on roller coaster and more people buy sandwich spread at supermarkets this is alliteration right so that could be a technique as well all right so inverted commas use of statistical data thus far those we have seen as um strategies hyperbole and alliteration those can be um take a kneex but we're not done there is more to the extract so let's like go through the entire thing what you want to do is go through the entire extract read get get a feel of what it's trying to tell you um that's why you're going to go through and try to find the main point and actually what the writer's purpose is right once you've figured that out you should be able to actually be able to analyze the piece and find out the rest of what you're supposed to find like the strategies and the techniques right now this is what stories make up the news crime stories dominate the news comprising 26.9 percent of the news airtime if it bleeds it leads remains a truism on local tv news crime rates have been done across the us over the last few years but not on local television news why that's a question according to the authors of the study crime events are dramatic and people and gain people's attention now i need you to pay attention right here what makes up the news crime stories dominate the news this is what we call hype hypophora right no hypophora is where a question is posed and directly after immediately after the answer is given and we've seen this twice right here when they say what makes of the news and right here when they ask why and they say according to this authors of the study right so this is also um the use of hypophora um right here if it bleeds it leads remains altruism on local tv news now if it if it bleeds it leads this is kind of satirical to me so i had i think i had dropped dystonia as satire right satire and that i had left for a technique no the difference between the techniques and the strategies are the techniques are more the figurative um figurative devices used to enhance the piece while the organizational strategies are more the ones that are used to construct the piece or lay the foundation for the piece i guess now the next paragraph next to news next to crime comes coverage of disasters such as fires car crashes floods and explosions 12.2 percent of the news followed by sports news 11.4 percent then comes coverage of health 10.1 government 8.7 and the economy 8.5 such topics as education the environment the arts and science receive little attention from 1.3 to 3.6 percent weather reports on the other hand average 10 of all newscasts everybody likes to talk about the weather and tv news is no exception comment the researchers they add any type of weather good or bad hot or cold wet or dry can elicit extensive tv news coverage here where i see them listing disasters such as fires car crashes um floods and explosions sports news then they spoke about health government the economy then they stated that the education the environment arts and science receive little attention this i can safely say is the use of examples and these are examples of what actually comes on the news no matter how small you know they're showing the proportions of what is shown on the news but it's still giving us examples of what is on the news right so that could be another strategy and you know while i go through this piece try to pick up some more drop them in the comments if you have you know guys i like i don't know how many of you do read the comments but it can be quite effective for you to read through the comments and see what other people have have to say have to people have to say because um i'm one person and these most times some of these things are just my opinion like stuff like this you have to be able to um support your answer with evidence right and once you can give a plausible evidence as to why your answer is correct then i by all means i believe it is you deserve your marks so all always look in the comments to see what others have to say and um this is actually a great way to find out what the caribbean has to say seeing that you're taking a caribbean examination because you have people from trinidad in the comments you have from barbados i think someone from saint kitts had like me the other day right so take advantage of the comments all right um where was i i think i actually i think i actually um okay on a positive note the report states that a growing number of journalists and viewers see the need for change however the study admits that such a change will not come easily because market forces and greed may always threaten quality journalism all right throughout the piece i also saw the use of the active voice right so i just jotted that anywhere on my page so the use of the active voice and this is how i actually plan my essays right um i said satire and i had actually written example and then state purpose right and that's how i approached that's how i approached writing my essay no i think when i first met this question i did not my teacher actually gave us the instructions and we were supposed to write one complete essay stating the main point the writer's purpose um you comment on the use of three strategies and the language three language techniques and also a third part was there to comment on the not evidence but evaluate the sewers yes i was supposed to evaluate the source [Applause] i was supposed to evaluate my source all right i think i saw that correct i know all right so what i had done was i planned my essay first it's always important to outline your plan it makes writing it so much easier and your plan that i think i think i think cxe gives you a box on one of the pages to plan your essays and stuff so take advantage of the space that you get there to plan your essays so i will write first i will figure out how am i going to divide my paragraph so i know i have an introduction a body paragraph and um depending on the points that i'm supposed to speak about i'll divide my body paragraphs based on that and then of course they need a good old conclusion and never complete an essay and not have a conclusion and so um for this i think i did a bit different i didn't use my conclusion to sum up the things that's a bit unorthodox but have good reasoning for that all right the thing is what i found out that evaluating my sources would not have taken up i don't think it would have i would have having had enough sentences for it to be accounted as one body paragraph so that's one of the reasons why i didn't put the evaluation of my source for you know one body paragraph but in the conclusion also the evaluation kind of just gave me a finishing feel to my essay and i don't know there are no rules to writing essays i don't believe there are any rules writing essays there's of course a standard you know for academic essays versus recreational or non-academic essays so it depends on the person who is writing the essay all right so whatever you feel would actually fit your aesthetic and your writing style because everyone's diction is a bit different even though we're a part of the same group you know we talk the same but we don't talk the same if you get what i'm saying so it depends on you who are writing the essay so if it feels right to you most most likely it is right all right so just trust yourself a bit when you're writing these things and don't doubt yourself saying that aid is probably wrong unless you know that what you're writing is utter garbage you know when you're writing garbage you know it's garbage because it feels like garbage all right so what i did was i said introduction and in the introduction i would put the main point of my piece or the writer's piece rather and the state the writer's purpose then i set out get a body paragraph or two body paragraphs and in the first body paragraph i will discuss about two strategies it was supposed to be three so three strategies and how i would do that is i would name the strategies i would provide examples or and or evidence and i would state um the purpose for using the strategy so basically how does it help to bring the main point across and drive the writers purpose so that's what i asked myself whenever i was going to discuss things like this so body paragraph 2 would have discussed the techniques and there should have been three techniques i think i put three in the essay anyways and what i would do i would name the technique so the technique that i would be naming would be like my topic statement and then i would go into explaining it so then i would provide evidence or an example where it was used in the um extractor that i was given and then i would state the purpose for using the technique and again basically say how it helps to bring the main point across and drive the writer's purpose and that's how i went about doing it now for the conclusion i evaluated my sewers and i don't think they had set it up here but the source is actually awake magazine it's um i think it's popular because i don't read that many magazines and i know this one but i don't think i don't know some will know it some won't but awake magazine was the source all right and for the evaluation of the source i will i i make it my point or due to whenever i'm evaluating my sources i think about currency relevance um credibility i hope you're not hearing that music i don't even know where it coming from credibility um credibility validity excuse me as i said i'm not going to chop anything from the video so give me a second all right hopefully that was better and so when i'm talking about evaluating my sources i think about credibility relevance the relevance of the topic currency validity um qualifications so basically are the who who who who is giving me this information are you an expert bro right so that's what you want to think about so qualifications all right so with that rundown let's get into the actual piece that i wrote and i only have a sample module one piece and a sample proposal for the part two i didn't think it was um fit for me to write a sample piece because um every piece would be kinda like very different to be honest like you need to know i'll go through though what you'd need to know to write it of course i won't leave you hanging so for the introduction i stay i said um the main purpose of this extract is that the actual news content on local television newscast in the united states is limited and the news covered encompasses negativity the writer's main purpose is to sensitize readers to the reality of how air time is wasted as most of it is used for commercials rather than important topics that would benefit that would be beneficial to viewers now i said the main point in this extract is right you are required to state blatantly that the main point is you're not supposed to um how should i say this be fancy with it right they want you to tell them plain and simple what the main point of the extract is right so um other ways in which you could say like the main point of this is you can say the main point um the main point is about or the main point speaks to let me just do a little writing so the main point is about the dot dot of course continue telling me what the main point is about or you could say the main point speaks to or you can say i guess the main point there are so many ways in which you can say it you know don't limit yourself the main point and compasses i remember in grade 12 i used to love using this word encompassed encompasses i feel like g man anyways so once i stated what the main point was i got straight into the the beef and just said yo the writer's main purpose is right i did not go around any corners i didn't beat around any bush if anything cut straight to the bush and walk to the other side right because you have to even keep in mind that you have a word limit so you can't be you can't be going around corners and telling me about sally and britta when sally and britain have nothing to do with the essay right so you need to manage your words properly so i said the offer so i stated that it's a sensitized reader so basically serve an informative purpose and tell me how you know how the reality is that air time is wasted and they use it use most of the news air time for commercials rather than important topics such as education sciences and arts and economic stuff i guess that's what the extract said right and that was it plain and simple for my introduction all right then i went into my body paragraph and i said you need to learn to use trans transitional phrases or words so i said throughout the article the author uses the active voice and here's my first strategy to give the readers an insight into the issue at hand and to encourage change so as i said stated what it was the strategy was and i told you how it was used to um actually drive the purpose and the main point then i said along with many other language strategies the author uses inverted commas to bring attention to words such as flow and soft those are my examples and the strategy i said was the use of inverted commas right by bringing attention to words such as fluff the writer further points out the gravity of the news and its content hardly possessing news topics right then i said the writer uses examples of what is shown on the news by listing segments of the news program like celebrity stories and terrible tenors contest all right um pay attention to the fact that i used these three dots here right i did not write the entire the entire p um line from the extract why i don't have enough i don't have enough words i i don't have enough word like space to do that like you give me a word limit i can't waste it on what you can go back up top and read so i just gave you this celebrity stories as a bit of a reference to what i'm speaking about but i'm not going to write everything because you have eyes brother you can go back up top and read it right so you can always use this trick to like cut your word limit a bit so you have like more you have more words available to you to use if you get what i'm saying so then i said this provides reader readers sorry with further evidence to support the writer's story it's all if it solidifies the general tone of the piece and further brings across the factual data clearly and succinctly hyperphora is also used midway throughout the article what stories make of the news criminal stories dominate the tv news dot dot dot of course i'm not going to write everything right hypophora as i said before is where a question is posed and the writer gives the answer immediately after no this heightens the reader's engagement i should have i don't think i should have have off the piece um i should probably with would be a better word here so engagement with the piece and compels the audience to decide in favor of the writer a lot as along with a question posed the answer is give or the answer is provided immediately after right so basically what i am saying is by using hyperphora the writer asks us the readers a question so that is making me connect with the writer and actually think about that question that he or she is asking me and try to come up with an answer while pondering that answer i'm giving the answer immediately after so i am i am like urged to agree with what the writer is saying right and it creates an impression of a dialogue with the reader's mind and increases reader rights or engagement sounds a bit now for my body paragraph number two which i said i would talk about the techniques i used this for my transition i said the writer also uses a few language techniques to enhance the piece firstly the writer uses alliteration terrible tenor contest sandwich spread at supermarkets right to add a rhythm and bring attention to the things which is carried on the newest it reminds the readers of the main point of the article and helps them to stay focused on it echoing the seriousness of the piece the line if it bleeds it leads or plays a satirical tone featured throughout the piece so here's another one another technique so i said alliteration and satirical tone or satire right it evokes humor as it expresses the extent to which the programs brought on the news by the information department in the united states is irrelevant the writer also uses hyperbolic words such as fluff to emphasize the situation this further causes the reader to give thought to the issue and either agree or disagree the piece is also saturated with satirical remarks and i said this already that's why it's great to proof reading stuff all right so for the conclusion i said the awake magazine is a trusted and well-seasoned magazine in pro presenting information to the public usually i would write the year for this like if it was if it were the gleaner man you'd see that 1834 slapped on that piece of paper but um i don't know all the magazines and when they were like oh so of course i didn't so but for like the jamaica anglino uh i think from 1834 the first gleno was released around that time so i would have said that you know it's been providing the information from 1839 i think so i would have said it's been providing the people with information from about you know that much for that for about that much time so of course um people would probably think it's giving credit credible information because it's as seasoned as we believe it to be and then i said along although the although the article was written 18 years ago right the article may still be considered valid as the topic being tackled is a current probe so i mean i'm telling you know that seeing that it's um a current issue it's relevant right so if it's relevant that's cool right and if it's relevant it's current and also the author uses statistical data the or the authors use what is wrong with me the author's use of statistical data brings out the factual information presented all right so that's how i am supported that you know that's how i evaluated my source could have taken a bit more but uh so that's how you want to go about doing your module one essay right so if you need to take a break pause the video go take a walk take a breather don't use this as a little swatting session instead try to understand what i'm saying right and once you understand you won't forget it trust me you understand now let's hear it so after um doing your module one so you want to even think about the time that you have to do your paper and i'll allocate enough time to write each essay and still leave your time to read over so pressure yourself to to actually get through it right and get your essays written properly as well you know pay attention to grammar and stuff like that now for your module 2 essay what they want this is what the um the the revised topics thing that cxc centos is so you need to know about these dialectal variety language registers communicative behaviors and attitudes to a language and be able to speak about it right so you need to be able to pick it up in a piece and actually talk about how the use how it is used in the piece and what effect it has on the piece right so basically if you know what they are how it's used in sentences or how it's used in extracts they just need to read that's what i'm telling you just read through a couple extracts and you start seeing them like right so um this was a 2017 paper someone somebody asked me to go through the 2017 paper but i'm so sorry i can't go through all of it so i'll just do section b from it all right i hope that's cool with you so here we go so this is ah once meetup oh my god i hate reading creole oh my god i once met a poet english poet a west indian you understand one of those who was always claiming oh oh we took over the motherland we was both waiting on taxi and this man nearly get me mad because just he start discussing culture in trinidad well i tell him i tell him i was a poet and oh i does use the vernacular well well you're with us jesus christ i apologize in advance well yeah would i swear that i cuz this man or insult he grandmother that man would start talking language like he work in bbc oh my god or he had the english department at university if you're hearing this dialect your fellow talk about it really what has to go you're all just neocolloquials an embarrassment to us who know such a limited language if language is the word it seems more like garbled english the worst i have ever heard english is no or language it's no longer the english man's like cricket we know control it do do try to understand why should one preserve this dialect so frivolous it just it's just a fad always changing no vocab it's simply speaking bad it isn't even standardized it goes each and every way some call it native language the vernacular others say what uses speaking dialect when you have to go abroad or speak at some great conference they won't make out a word you chaps misled the people by holding up on high a base part of our culture that should be quietly left to die think of names like milton prospero and or caliban think of william shakespeare that's the height of language man but what's the this this and that and them unless it's just for style and if it's just for impact it's hardly worth the while take myself for instance i've got my phd i can tell the world about english at university i want i i think they wanted that university to be like university anyways i've got um [Music] roger thesaurus i've got my book of quotes you will never hear me use such words as wassie scrunt and or shorts when you run from dialect is you running from you so the answer is the maxim to thine own self to be true so i don't worry take them on i just waiting to see when they find out who they are or who they want to be for dialect don't bother them is them that bother it or bother it because dialect living home is them that have to fit well see um they give you like the word the meaning of the word short george's shorts by people of ill repute um scrunt is woman of ill repute why a lot of ill repute here was he to get in a wild and uncontrollable manner all right let me tell you i um i absolutely hate when people say that creole is broken language like i think i think creole is quite dynamic for you know what it actually is and like i don't think that it should be considered broken language or if people use cruel means to them chat but like let's say me for instance like love chat patois nagaly it's fun and i think it helps us as youth to actually know a bit more about our culture and where we're coming from because you know history has a lot of things to do with it from us being colonized to us being free and coming a long way so i don't think that um the use of creole should be um you know suffocated and um shunned on or given the cold shoulder because you know people think we're chat bad like people talking swahili i know you i'm sure some people don't understand a word like if your talks were healing probably i understand but like you know i said people would talk the swahili chat bad because they don't understand what i'm saying that'll make no sense anyways let's get into it and let me stop ranting and stuff so it says in an essay of no more than 500 words discuss the following they want you to discuss dialectical variation used by each speaker in the poem so here i'm telling you i need to know what dialectical variation is right and they want you to want also the link you want you to discuss sorry the link between the language choice and social identification right and then you need to speak about two ways in which our video presentation could highlight the different perspectives of the speakers this is like this has a bit to do with attitudes towards language all right so first of all what you want to do is identify the different dialectical variations used in um in the i in the piece i think it's a poem yes it's a poem my memory is so shallow though yes i just read a poem like joe yes so you want to examine the poem that you just read right and you want to see how how the how they use different um the different the language differently in you know this one community community so in the caribbean we have what is called a language continuum or creole continue continuum where we speak about the barcelona the mesoliths and the acrylic right i'm going to write that somewhere for those who have never heard this before so you can like write it down so baselet name so messa means middle all right fun fact and you have the acrylic all right now it says that the bar select is used by people who aren't so privileged to education the impoverished basically those people who haven't really gotten the chance to be upgraded intellectually or on the intellectual sphere or in the intellectual sphere or on that scale or lado right so people who chat really bad well like put one way you probably don't know or or creole that you really can't understand so that's what they're saying people like who uses the bar select right so um i'm from jamaica so let's use that as an example so people in you know jamaica has different parishes and i've heard this thing where they say that it depends on which parish you come from in jamaica like the part were different where creole is different so you don't really like somebody from ochi will talk apart or out but she's not a parish saint anne let's say saint anne and then someone else in say saint thomas would have a different variation of the power so um it's not like universally understood and i can't attest to that because i don't travel anywhere so um then the miss select would be a mix between like you can't say it represents the middle class because those would be the people who they say you is both the creole and you know jamaica and standard english or let's not say jamaican standard english because it's a caribbean exam standard english right those who use creole and the standard english whether that be um some french creole and some other standard english or you know the jamaican creole and you know jamaican standard english right but then you have the acrylic which they say are used by the people of what you call it the oprah class right you know all flashy all looks out and stuff what we call having heavy drip right so um those people are the ones who are a part of the who have phds masters you know high positions in parliament people who are um media personalities people who people who have money full stop you know p that's what they that's how they refer to it like upper class people so people who of the upper class or people who use the acrylic would be those who are a bit more privileged i guess so you want to think high risk aristocracy high level high-end people right so that's it but i don't think this whole continuum thing is necessarily true because what i'm sure that the prime minister you spot one no ending right so i guess it depends on the person but that's how it's that's what they're talking about right so you're going to talk about how this is used throughout the piece as per the different language varieties right and how the continuum is actually employed and how that speaks to um what was that what was this what did they say the social identification so this man who is speaking standard english and all so permanent proper he see he said he he has his phd and you can tell the world about english at a university he's got his thesaurus his book of course like nobody cares that you have a book of quotes no offense to that man like i don't i don't give any flying fishes to be honest and you have what he speaks about milton prospero or um caliban all all references to william shakespeare who was this high-end writer right that he says that's the heights of language man right so he is don't playing the language because it's not standard english that seems like he is saying that spanish isn't a language or french isn't a language that's how it feels to me i'm quite i'm quite offended but let's not take anything personally it's just a poem but yeah now this woman is defending her language or her dialect because the um the creole isn't considered a language for that's a whole nother story i'll make a video on that why the creole isn't considered a language but rather a dialect so she's defending her dialect and saying that it is not speaking bad it is not right but she she says that um she she's not going to make that bother her it's not going to let it bother her because she knows who she is basically she know who she is she knows who she is she know how her language is you know what it's about you know the origins how it came about you know all of that so it's for this man to be judging her based on her language and actually putting her in a social class because of that it's not right right so you just need to speak about how the language used was actually used to for social identification and you know the different dialectical variations used right and you want to speak about two ways in which um a video presentation could highlight the different perspectives of the speakers all right so we're giving audio visual aid aid aid not yet for from giving from presenting audio visual aid that can that can have many advantages because it can show you um it can show you exactly what's happening giving you direct insight you can see like for some people it's easier to see what's happening and understand what's happening so that could be a point and it can give you a bit more hands-on um view or insight into the situation so you can see how the woman is um the woman is reacting versus how the man is reacting and you can get insight into communicative behavior so also um gestures facial expression things like that will come into play and you know that from it can from it can pick up from you can pick up tone from facial expressions and body language you know that there is a whole new avenue to communication that opens up right there because let's say you're talking to someone over the phone you're just hearing their voice right and you say hey you can't help me out with my homework tonight and the person is saying um yeah man i'm unsure sure sure just call me whatever time you're ready and think but you're not a sister then feel skinned up from yourself to africa but if you were in front of them assisted them face skin up let them smell something then you would know that hey this person don't really want to help you you know so i bet you go your other way and go try find help somewhere else right but instead you're just hearing their voice saying hey yeah i wanna help you but in truth and in fact i don't want to help you i end up in some foolishness i get what i'm saying so that's so you know a visual representation can help you i hope you guys are understanding what i'm saying and i'm not talking too fast if you're getting what i'm saying make sure you leave that down in the comments and tell me that you're enjoying the video and i'm not boring you to death because i know how these things can stay and it's like what 48 minutes and i told you i'm not doing any cuts i'm posting the video raw so you can just get it and you know get studying for your exam or doing your final preparations now for this module three question i'm going to apologize from now i could not for the life of me find instructions i could not so i just wrote based on what i remember but this was what we were um supposed to do so you and the team of the team of um the technology innovators club has come up with a new app and would like to do a test run that should have been run as i told you i was trying to pump this up real quick for you guys so forgive my mistakes so i test using students at school test run like a test run here so write a proposal to the to your principal making the request so include a name for the app i know that was a part of the interest instructions you're supposed i was also supposed to say how it's beneficial and how it will be presented right so for your proposal this is where you get persuading for the rest of the pieces they are more factual based so they're more argumentative like stating that this is this and that's the fact and support it with evidence no this proposal is supposed to persuade the person who you're making the request to to give you your way kind of sound weird but yeah you want your so you're going to pull out your techniques now before i go into anything ensure that you guys know the different logos of appeals right because this sometimes they're going to tell you to talk about that in your pieces so to tell how you can use those appeals and which ones you'll use and how that will help your proposal right so let's get into what i had written i think i got full marks on this um actually got full marks on this piece and the piece up top i think i don't remember most of my things i got full marks on to be honest um so the members of the technological innovators club have created an app called studybodylight it is aimed at helping students with their school lives by measuring and assessing the students productivity though there is a possibility of the student's privacy being infringed it is highly unlikely there are there may be issues with accessibility as the application is not yet compatible with ios operating systems so will therefore be inaccessible to apple users also students and parents alike may not want to participate in this exercise nevertheless the team is seeking your permission to carry out a test run on willing participants as our ultimate goal is to correct any issues and improve the student's overall productivity and performance now you know i'm there off the bat telling you what is wrong with my piece normally if like i know that if i'm going to a business meeting or an interview i'm not going to tell you what's wrong with me first before i tell you what to write with me right but for this i did say what's wrong first but then i said that even though there is possibility of this going wrong like it's highly unlikely so that's why i thought it was okay to just you know after about telling what's wrong mate what may be wrong with my my abs my abs my jesus my app before you know i'll it before i go into ho it will you know how i'll present it and stuff and i told what the benefit the first thing i did was i told you after about what my my app was so it's called study body light and what's it what is it used to do it is used to track students lab by measuring and assess assessing their productivity right and of course without with an app like that of course there will be some infringement on privacy because probably as for age you know um school at which you know it's being used the different um subjects that you do so that's that's all private information but it's still going to give it to the app so that's still you know you know but it's no harmful infringement so um then i stated that you know we are st this is our first run so people using apple devices you're not going to have access to it but that's okay we can use android users that's all we need so we need students and i said that even though students and parents won't might not be like willing to participate we're still seeking the permission to carry it out because there will be some willing participants like everybody now against it trust me like you know for things like that not everyone will be against it so we want to do this because even though we might not get the okay from some parents and some students we want to do this because our ultimate goal is to correct any issues and to improve the students overall productivity and performance right so yeah yeah studybodylight name what is it it's m right and possibility of that that that not after not available for up ios operating system users or apple users and that nevertheless that's my turning point right there and da-da-da oh my god and guys this is literally a screenshot from the the paper that i gave to my teacher so that's why it's not time to like typed out on the screen i think you get what i'm saying no through careful planning we hope to persuade the students and per and parents to pursue this project with us we plan on engaging the audience by a mixture by the use of a mixture of the jamaican creole and jamaican standard english the formal register will be used and although we will utilize the jamaican creole the language register may still be considered formal as it is only applied to make the app relatable rather than informal because i i'm basically saying that my team and i understand that we're not only talking to parents but students so we need to switch it up a bit switch up the the way or the mode of communication a bit so i can actually reach the students as well because i'm not only trying to convince the parents that i'm trying to make their ch their child's or children's life better but i'm trying to persuade the students as well that hey i'm here to help you right so that's why i said that i would use a mixture of both the jamaican creole and the jamaican standard english now the reason for using a mixture of both language varieties is to reflect the way in which students within the school speak on a regular basis and to increase the students relatability to the application now the jamaican standard english will be used to help communicate the seriousness of the message as at the end of the day we hope to have a successful implementation geared at helping our peers along with ourselves we plan to present this idea to the parents at a parent teachers association meeting what we call a pta meeting and we will also inform the students about the app in the school's newsletter and via posters as a way of visual communication presented around the campus the application will be launched online and made available for or for online sampling having a short survey after a few weeks of using the app the survey solely queries the students experience with the app after a period of a single week this will help us to figure out the issues it the issues is the issues which the app possesses i think i'm reading faster than my brain is comprehending the application will be available for use on smartphones tablets and any other device which is compatible with android operating systems now the app will be presented via the google play store for free i urge you to consider this proposal as we strongly believe that this application has the com the capability to improve the students lives and produce better students and happier parents you know better grades you know mommy and daddy face smiling off ear to ear so help us to foster the incrementation of productivity and performance of our students and that was my proposal so this was this was like a pitch right if you want help with pitches go watch shark tank not sending it to go binge watch nothing right now because you know it's exam time but watch an episode of shark tank and see if you get the idea of how you make a pitch right your pitch is basically yo how you're going to sell your product from a carousel product in a room with a few investors i can't sell it to the public right and don't get me wrong not everybody in the room of investors have to you know agree with their brother like just get one person on board and you're a good brother so yeah this was it 58 minutes this is a new record i hope i wasn't talking too fast but you know the just you know the drill like drop a like on this video of course i've told you to comment so many times and don't be afraid to hit me up on instagram at underscore cam underscore eo my name is kami lee by the way and as on um young underscore genius dot official also that's my business ig page so also i must tell 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